The prompt: "Some people think governments should invest more in public transport instead of building new roads. To what extent do you agree?"
Band 6.0 — Competent
This version addresses the prompt but the position is unclear, ideas are underdeveloped, and the vocabulary is mechanical.
Nowadays, transportation is a very important issue in our modern society. Some people believe that governments should spend money on public transport, while others think they should build more roads. In my opinion, both sides have some good points.
On the one hand, public transport has many advantages. It is cheap and it can carry many people. Also, it is good for the environment because it reduces pollution. Many cities have buses and trains which are used by a lot of people every day.
On the other hand, roads are also very important. People who have cars need roads to drive on. New roads can help reduce traffic jams. If there are no roads, the country cannot develop and the economy will suffer.
In conclusion, I think governments should invest in both public transport and roads. Both are important for the country. This is the best solution for everyone.
Why this is band 6, not higher
- Task Response — 6. The position is genuinely unclear. The prompt asks to what extent do you agree — a band 7+ essay would commit to a position. "Both sides have some good points" is not an answer.
- Coherence — 6. Paragraphs are organised, but transitions are mechanical ("On the one hand... on the other hand..."). Ideas are listed, not developed.
- Lexical Resource — 6. "Nowadays", "in our modern society", "many advantages" — recycled, generic phrasing. No precision.
- Grammar — 6. Almost entirely simple and compound sentences. Complex structures (conditionals, relative clauses, participles) are absent.
Band 7.0 — Good
Same prompt, much sharper response. A clear position, developed arguments, more varied grammar — but still showing the gaps that hold it below 8.
Faced with growing congestion and air pollution, many governments must decide whether to expand their road networks or invest more heavily in public transport. I strongly agree that the latter should be the priority, because it addresses both problems simultaneously and offers a more sustainable long-term solution.
The most compelling argument for prioritising public transport is its efficiency. A single metro line can carry the equivalent of dozens of lanes of car traffic, while occupying a fraction of the urban space. Cities such as Tokyo and Singapore demonstrate that high-quality rail and bus networks can move millions of people daily without the gridlock that defines car-dependent cities. Building more roads, by contrast, tends to induce additional demand: wider highways quickly fill up, leaving the original problem unsolved.
Furthermore, the environmental case is clear. Private vehicles are among the largest contributors to urban emissions, and shifting commuters to electric trains and buses dramatically reduces a city's carbon footprint. Although building public transport infrastructure is expensive, the long-term savings — in healthcare costs, climate adaptation, and lost productivity from traffic — significantly outweigh the investment.
In conclusion, while road maintenance remains necessary, new investment should overwhelmingly go to public transport. It is more efficient, more environmentally sustainable, and a better use of public funds.
Why this is band 7, not 8
- Task Response — 7. Clear position, both body paragraphs support it. Loses the half-band because the counter-argument (roads) is not addressed seriously — the essay would be stronger if it briefly acknowledged when road expansion is justified.
- Coherence — 7. Logical flow, good paragraph topic sentences. "Furthermore" and "although" are accurate but slightly mechanical. Cohesion within paragraphs is good.
- Lexical — 7. Strong collocations ("induce demand", "car-dependent", "healthcare costs"). Missing the very precise, less common items that mark band 8.
- Grammar — 7. Variety of structures including comparatives, subordinate clauses, and concessives. Some errors absent. To hit 8, would need more frequent error-free sentences and more sophisticated structures.
Band 8.0 — Very good
The shift from 7 to 8 is rarely about grand ideas — it is about precision in every sentence, more flexible grammar, and arguments that engage with complexity rather than restating one position three times.
As cities expand and car ownership rises, governments are increasingly forced to choose where their limited transport budgets are best spent. Although there remains a narrow case for selective road improvements, I strongly agree that the bulk of public investment should be directed towards mass transit, on the grounds of both efficiency and long-term environmental responsibility.
The most persuasive argument is one of urban geometry. A modern metro line can transport upwards of forty thousand passengers per hour in a single direction; a freeway lane, at peak capacity, carries fewer than two thousand. This basic asymmetry means that road expansion in dense cities offers diminishing returns, while well-planned rail networks continue to absorb growth for decades. The experience of Copenhagen and Seoul — both of which deliberately scaled back urban motorways in favour of cycling and rail infrastructure — suggests that the trade-off pays off not only in mobility but in liveability.
The environmental argument reinforces this conclusion. Transport emissions in most cities are dominated by private vehicles, and incremental road-building locks in further car dependence for the decades it takes for an expressway to be amortised. Investing the same capital in electrified public transport delivers an immediate cut in emissions per passenger-kilometre, while also reducing exposure to particulate pollution in low-income neighbourhoods that disproportionately line existing motorways.
That said, a complete rejection of road investment would be misguided — maintaining existing infrastructure, improving rural access, and adapting roads for electric and freight use all remain legitimate priorities. The argument is not against roads, but against the assumption that more asphalt is the default response to congestion. On balance, the case for shifting the centre of gravity towards public transport is overwhelming.
What lifts this to band 8
- Task Response — 8. A nuanced position that addresses the to what extent qualifier directly. Concedes ground in paragraph four without weakening the central argument.
- Coherence — 8. Each paragraph opens with a clear topic sentence and develops one main idea. Linking is sophisticated and embedded ("on the grounds of", "that said", "by contrast") rather than slotted in.
- Lexical — 8. Precise, often less common, used naturally: "urban geometry", "diminishing returns", "amortised", "car dependence", "particulate pollution". Collocations are accurate throughout.
- Grammar — 8. Wide range used flexibly: passive constructions, em-dashes for parenthetical comment, complex subordination, sophisticated comparison. Sentences are nearly all error-free.
The pattern across all three
Look at the openings:
- Band 6: "Nowadays, transportation is a very important issue..." — generic, no thesis.
- Band 7: "Faced with growing congestion and air pollution, many governments must decide..." — situates the argument, commits to a position.
- Band 8: "As cities expand and car ownership rises, governments are increasingly forced to choose..." — frames a tension, then resolves it with a precise position.
The first sentence does a tremendous amount of work. A band 8 opening commits to a specific frame for the essay; a band 6 opening commits to nothing. If you can fix your opening, the rest of the essay usually follows.
Don't write more — write more precisely. The band 6 essay above is 260 words. The band 8 essay is 360. The difference is not 100 extra words of content; it is 100 extra words of precision.
Every essay you submit to Opiliant is graded against these same patterns. The feedback shows you exactly which sentences are at your current band, which are below, and which are pulling you up.